I did the same challenge—it seems we wrote ours in similar veins. Yours is absolutely amazing. I love it. Especially since with the line “We called it ‘Yoda’s Hut’” I have a very exact picture of what the place looks like.

Good job. :)

I like ‘When did I stop laughing?”. I wish I could go back to the little haven in the woods I had growing up, but alas, coal mines. I can smell your story, fabulous! And the last line is the best!

wow. I could really see what your ‘Yoda’s Hut.’ And I can see a boy walking up, remembering playing insdie of it. Nice job.
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you paint a vivid picture, my minds eye sees and feels what you wrote, a piece of childhood, a wonderful memory thats lasts a lifetime, funny how going back to places you can hear/see/taste what it was like in a diffrent time in your life. Would that I couold stop time, or as the song goes, save time in a bottle, you did a great job of captureing a time and place.

aww that is so cool!
I wish I had a “Yoda’s hut” when I was a little kid!

Rather mature soul searching for a twelve-year-old, but then we do grow up fast down here. Thomas Wolfe was and still is right.

This is amazing. I seriously have to bookmark it, it’s one of the best things I’ve ever read.
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Oh, wow. Beautiful. It’s things like this that make me afraid of growing up too fast. Imagine getting so involved and emotional over a story. Now that’s what I call “good writing.”

I’m lucky to still have friends that I grew up with, they help me recapture my youth if only a little, not entirely. Here’s a surprise comment I’m sure you’ve never heard before because you aren’t that good of a storyspeller <<<<< That was a tremendous ficlet!

The part about being a bad writer was meant with heavy sarcasm.

thats beautiful, amazing

Hey, it’s the Featured Ficlet!! Congrats!!

ya congrats on featured ficlet!!!!!

Nice. Needs more description. Also needs a hook. Why should I read this story?

Very nicely captures the pain of leaving childhood behind. There are so many things to look forward too, but God, it’s hard looking back…

Everybody seems to have said all there is to say. So let me simply ask: can you write anything bad? That might be a new challenge for you…

Wow, doesn’t get any better than Saint Chuck’s praise right there, though I should confess that I’ve written plenty of bad, bad things. Just as my junior high guidance counselor.

wow that was, truly amazing- i almost cried

wow that was, truly amazing- i almost cried