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Beheaded [Doll challenge]

She stood there in her lacy nightgown on the edge of the cliff. The sky was dark. Huge black clouds rolled containing a fury that was soon to be unleashed. The sea far below was just as dark and angrily crashed into the rocks at the foot of the cliff The wind whipped her hair back in long tangles. Her face was already soaked with tears. She breathed in the sea mist in shuddering breaths and tried to compose herself. In her hand she held the head of her most precious porcelain doll.

This was the doll her father had traveled across the sea in a ship to get for her. This was the doll that had come special delivery. This was her best friend and most treasured possession. It went with her everywhere.

She raised it to eye-level. It’s expressionless eyes stared into her soul. It’s delicate lips held tight against secrets she once shared with it. Her lace sleeve blew up over the face and her thoughts turned grim. It wasn’t a doll anymore. It was just a head.

She threw it. Now it was like her father, lost at sea.

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Freedom :]
Posted 8 months ago

this is haunting and written well. great job.
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Melia
Posted 8 months ago

Ohhh so sad. So very sad. Absolutely well-written and descriptive.
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SKermitgorf
Posted 8 months ago

wow. haunting is a good word to describe your ficlet. One of the best if nt the best in the challenge so far.
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NightMaiden
Posted 8 months ago

wow… (sits with mouth open) really good
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Nouvelle Bardot
Posted 8 months ago

beauifully expressed, mistress hawk. i absoutely love this.
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Jenunique
Posted 8 months ago

Excellent. I was half expecting the child to jump. Glad she didn’t, by the way. Perfectly titled.
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Tad Winslow
Posted 8 months ago

There’s a ton packed in here, it’s like two ficlets in one. Depth and description is pouring over the top and I’m lapping it up with enjoyment. Excellent.
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Tad Winslow
Posted 8 months ago

There’s a ton packed in here, it’s like two ficlets in one. Depth and description is pouring over the top and I’m lapping it up with enjoyment. Excellent.
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Tad Winslow
Posted 8 months ago

my computer was being slow and i got click happy, oops.
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Sturek
Posted 8 months ago

I agree with all above. Excellent Ficlet. Haunting, sad and very rich. Great work.
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SKermitgorf
Posted 8 months ago

Congrats on feature.. this should be the winner gets my vote.
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Blusparrow
Posted 8 months ago

This is amazing!! congrats on getting featured! If you don’t win I will go crazy!
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Ana Cristina
Posted 8 months ago

Congratulations on getting featured, Elsha! This story definitely deserves it because it is beautifully written.
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White Hat
Posted 8 months ago

Kickass.
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THX 0477
Posted 8 months ago

Great message/moral/psychological association captured in that last line. Beautfully written.
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Mistress Elsha Hawk
Posted 8 months ago

I am SOOO Excited about being featured! Thanks everyone for your comments and stars! Thanks especially Ana, for providing this challenge! Whether or not I’m chosen as the challenge winner, I feel great that made it to the Featured Ficlet!
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Valerie Joy
Posted 8 months ago

Wow, wonderful piece! Beautifully written and haunting…
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Ana Cristina
Posted 7 months ago

Congrats on winning my challenge! :-)
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Mistress Elsha Hawk
Posted 7 months ago

Thanks Ana! I accept this certification with gratitude and grace. I couldn’t have done it without you for issuing the challenge and the photographer who captured the image. I also would like to thank those responsible for featuring it and those who commented upon it! :)
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