Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

by Culture Shock w/ Mike Schwartz

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The shout took me off guard and instantly I felt the blood rush to my face. I suddenly felt so alone and exposed with the silence that filled the room. The engulfing darkness was almost too hard to bear.

Slowly I picked up on faint giggles from the direction of the shout. How long had it been since I heard a woman’s voice? How long had I shut myself away in this apartment?

And now I felt as though everything I knew had been invaded. The world was no longer just this room and my piano. My music had fallen on more than my own ears.

I clutched the edge of my precious Steinway as I lifted myself from the bench. I carefully shuffled to the open window, tripping only once on some boxes John must have left to the side.

My fingers clung to the sill as I felt the cool breeze hit me in the face. It was enthralling to feel the sensation of it sweeping over my shoulders and down my arms.

“Excusez-moi madame, je suis désolé terriblement que je vous ai dérangés. Je ne savais pas que d’autres écoutaient.”

I waited.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

    Culture Shock w/ Mike Schwartz's Buddy Icon Culture Shock w/ Mike Schwartz

    Posted 6 months ago

    Ok like I said earlier… I don’t know French so i used an internet translator… if it is terribly wrong please correct me…

  2. Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 6 months ago

    Seemed pretty good to me, but I bombed the equivalence exam in college cause I could never pick the most correct way to say stuff. Another great addition. I like that he at least seems capable of coming out of his little cave of torments.
    LoA

  3. Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

    Nouvelle Bardot's Buddy Icon Nouvelle Bardot

    Posted 6 months ago

    MAYBE PIERRE WILL SUPRISE US AND END UP BEING BILINGUAL . I LOVE THIS , HOW HE FEELS LIKE HE ’S BEEN INVADED .
    LOA .

  4. Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

    Nouvelle Bardot's Buddy Icon Nouvelle Bardot

    Posted 6 months ago

    okay, i just translated the french. my, pierre is terribly polite.

  5. Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    In the part where you have “la madame,” better to write “Excusez-moi, madame.” You don’t need the article “la” there. It’s similar to how we say “ma’am.” Everything else is fine. Yay for getting the accents right. ;)

  6. Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Help! I don’t speak French! Translate someone please.

  7. Pierre Discovers the World is Listening

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    You are right, Nouvelle, Pierre is terribly polite. The translation reads:
    “Excuse me lady, I am terribly sorry that I have bothered. I did not know that others were listening.”

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