No More Promises

by THX 0477

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I’m sorry. I can’t promise you anything. I’ve tried, but heaven help me I’m so flawed.

You see me as your knight in flannel armor, tucking you in on a cold night. You’ve always seen the best in me, the best of me. But you don’t know.

Nobody knows. On the outside, I know all the right things to do, right things to say, the right way to be. It’s an art, honed by years of lies and deceit, to myself and everyone else.

It’s not like I’m some movie villain, full of complicated schemes to rule the world, a tragic childhood, and a pool of genetically altered sharks. I’m just a guy, an evil, prideful, selfish guy. I don’t want to be that way, and that’s why I lie. The lie is a good one, but every once in a while I see myself in the mirror.

That’s when I see me, the real me, for just a flash. He’s not kind. He’s not true. Some day he…I’ll do something horrible. I’ll let you down, crush you, and crush me.

I’m sorry. I can’t promise you anything. I’ve tried, but heaven help me I’m so flawed.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

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    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wow..I wouldn’t say evil.. Id say dark and self loathing. Good edition. Cant say i dislike it. If I said that, id be.. well a liar. I know most guys feel like this, and its a shame. It was an enjoyment to read.

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    Kevin Lawver's Buddy Icon Kevin Lawver

    Posted 7 months ago

    I think every dad goes through that… Please don’t look at me like that kid, I’m just a guy. “Daddy” is way too much responsibility. My oldest keeps asking me questions with that look on his face like he knows I know the answer… and most of the time, I just don’t (he’s really freaky smart).

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    visionary vixen!'s Buddy Icon visionary vixen!

    Posted 7 months ago

    holyy.. this was reallly good!
    i found it intense and capturing.
    =] i liked.

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 7 months ago

    a flawed hero, feels unworthy of the loved offered.. told in a humorous way..
    LoA

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    p.lauré's Buddy Icon p.lauré

    Posted 7 months ago

    i really like this, it’s like getting underneath his skin and realizing who he really is.

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    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Something haunting about this…your word choice is always so beautiful. It flows so naturally. Subtle repetition (first and last line) left an echo, seemed to wrap up the story without a too-definite ending. Beautifully written. Bittersweet.
    LoA

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