Waiting for the Right Moment

by Ben Paddon

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“There she is,” whispered Seb.

“You weren’t lying about her looks, were you?” said Mark, wide-eyed. He started to walk over, but was yanked back by Seb.

“What’re you doing?” Seb hissed.

“I’m going to go over there and ask her out,” Mark replied.

“I didn’t ask you here so you could ask her out!”

Mark frowned. “Well then why am I here?”

“Well I can’t do this on my own,” said Seb, matter-of-factly.

“You can’t just walk up to someone and ask them out?”

“Not,” scowled Seb, “At a funeral parlour, no.”

“Personally, I’m of the opinion that so long as it’s not her funeral, you’re basically alright.”

“You have a very unique set of moral standards, you know that?”

“Thanks!” smiled Mark.

“Besides which,” Seb went on, “She’s always here.”

“Blimey. Maybe she’s a Necrophiliac.”

“She works here,” shouted Seb. “That’s two taboos in one shot, that is – asking a girl out at a funeral, and asking her out while she’s at work.”

“I say just do it,” said Mark. “But we should probably bury your Mum first.”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Waiting for the Right Moment

    Melia's Buddy Icon Melia

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Funny dialogue with a ba-dum-bum ending! Loved it.

  2. Waiting for the Right Moment

    Ben Paddon's Buddy Icon Ben Paddon

    Posted 7 months ago

    I’ve decided that Mark and Seb are my de facto characters for conversation between two guys about… well, about anything.

  3. Waiting for the Right Moment

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    great witty dialogue.. reminds me of the guys on the brit com Coupling, what they would say and do.

  4. Waiting for the Right Moment

    Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)'s Buddy Icon Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    “That’s two taboos in one shot, that is – asking a girl out at a funeral, and asking her out while she’s at work.”
    And at his mother’s funeral. Hat trick!
    Great job! Off to read the sequel.

  5. Waiting for the Right Moment

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    My favorite- “Personally, I’m of the opinion that so long as it’s not her funeral, you’re basically alright.” Great job! :)

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