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I woke up to a face full of dirt and cold metal around my wrists. Sputtering and shaking my head, I tried to make sense of the strange situation.

It didn’t help my growing unease to hear one of the cousins, “Primo, I don’t think you hit him hard enough.”

The other, Juacinto I think, retorted hotly, “What you expect? Abuela says no shooting, no stabbing…what does that leave me to work with?!”

“Uh, guys…”

“Why you yelling at me? It’s not my fault you hit like a…”

“Guys. Can we discuss why I’m in a hole with…handcuffs? You put me in handcuffs?” They stopped, resting on their shovels, apparently grateful for any break.

Juacinto adjusted his bandana from out of his eyes and said quite politely, “Abuela says you are going to bring a great evil into the world…”

“And kill Lupita in the process,” his cousin added with a nod.

“So, we have to kill you,” Juacinto finished with a shrug, like it was the most natural thing in the world. And, information shared, they went back to burying me alive.

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Ana Cristina
Posted about 1 month ago

And the plot thickens… That’s a great last line. Where’s Lupita, though! Something tells me she just won’t let them bury him alive, even if he did ditch her in high school. Then again, us girls have been known to hold a grudge.
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Russell Ruffino
Posted about 1 month ago

Nice, I like where you’ve taken this series.
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Freedom
Posted about 1 month ago

Agree with Ana, can’t wait for a sequel. Great job on this series. I’m not sure about her forgiving him, but you never know. And I would like to know soon…ha
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Music-Hearted
Posted about 1 month ago

Also agreeing with Ana- awesome last line. It makes the event seem so ordinary, when it really isn’t.

And I must agree with you- daffodils just scream spring. Except it doesn’t look like spring here, it’s snowing.
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paper flowers
Posted about 1 month ago

This just keeps getting better and better!
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thebetweenspace
Posted about 1 month ago

Great series, very intrigued. Like the others, I loved the last line. It makes you thirst for more.
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Ridcully Calvert
Posted about 1 month ago

I especially enjoyed the opening paragraph – very hard hitting.

As per the other commentators, I am quite enjoying this series
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.:band baby:.
Posted about 1 month ago

haha. sucks to be him! =( But he’ll get out… right..??
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flute faerie
Posted about 1 month ago

Poor guy! I’m sure he doesn’t deserve it!
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Kermitgorf
Posted about 1 month ago

You have a way of turning a serious situation into a comical one. not an easy task.
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J.B. Williams
Posted about 1 month ago

Well, since he asked, they went ahead and told him. Personally, I would have wanted to know.
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Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)
Posted about 1 month ago

Oh, man. Probably my second least favourite option of how to go (the first being drowning in the ocean). ^shudder
This just gets better and better. :D
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