Punctuations of a Downtrodden Life

by THX 0477

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The rumble. It seemed like life was a sea of uncertainty punctuated by these cataclysmic eruptions of violence. I always thought there should be something more, but what do I know? I’m probably the youngest here, in the crew just cause of my brother Alex.

Life, whether you’re poor or snooty riches, is about connections. I’ve figured that much out. Our friends, our connections were gathering to this random street corner. Their friends were gathering too. It’s what you do. You mess with one; you mess with all. It’s the only way for our kind to be safe.

“You losers ready?” Alex taunted. Chris, newly arrived, gave him a look. The rival group stirred, and someone said something rude. Gestures, slurs, and a few comments about people’s mothers were exchanged. The fight was inevitable now.

Everyone tensed, narrowed their focus. Adrenaline flowed like rain but all for naught. The oscillating red and blue announcement of authority put an end to our passion play and sent everyone scattering. For now.

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  1. Punctuations of a Downtrodden Life

    Never Explain's Buddy Icon Never Explain

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    nice job! very well written. You practically sent me to the Barnes and Noble to buy a new dictionary :] I’ll sequel soon

  2. Punctuations of a Downtrodden Life

    Never Explain's Buddy Icon Never Explain

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    sequelled

  3. Punctuations of a Downtrodden Life

    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 4 months ago

    You can make even the most brutal and unintelligent things seem eloquent and slightly less mundane than they really are, a quality I rather admire in you. Nice work.
    LoA

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    Posted 3 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    The description of the scene is – as always – beautiful, but the “big words” don’t quite gel with the character.
    LoA

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