The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

by Bartimaeus

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She’s that girl with the plad blue skirt, the one who always has to be right. All the band dudes steal glances at her while she plays her French horn.

Oh, but those guys are too late for this beautiful girl, because she’s secretly in love… with a Junior who plays the Cello. His name runs through her head all day, and her heart is too attatched to take notice of the other boys looking at her. She sees him in the hallway, and meets his secretive emerald eyes, which spill over with beauty like two jade holy grails… pouring over with what she hoped and prayed was love.
She does not dare to ask, though the temptation drags her ever closer each day. She wonders if he too is secretly in love with her. Could they stay this way? Remaining secretly in love, and secretly comitted to one another. But even feelings as promising as these do not eliminate doubt, which lingers under her heart, waiting for it to fall into its clutches. But what she does not know is this beautiful boy playing the cello is cursed.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

    Bartimaeus' Buddy Icon Bartimaeus

    Posted 5 months ago

    Hmm, i guess i just have something for girls who plays instruments.

  2. The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 5 months ago

    Very romantic, and very high school. It was definitely a fun take on the challenge, adding a good amount of story to the whole thing.
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  3. The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

    Storykeeper of Fae's Buddy Icon Storykeeper of Fae

    Posted 5 months ago

    I loved the fact that you have here the possiblility for magic. I like the image of band. One of my best friends is a horn player. I like that he plays the cello, too. That has an inexplicable lullaby, dreamy effect to it. Nicely done indeed.
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  4. The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 5 months ago

    Yes, dreamy and fun, also romantic and cute. The last line, last word, cursed, puts a different vibe on the whole thing. A sour note, if you will. :)
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  5. The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I loved this. Many of my AP English students (I teach high school) are in band, so I’ve developed a soft spot for “band babies.” I especially liked how innocent this felt, up until that last ominous sentence. Well done!
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  6. The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 5 months ago

    Well put together story and descriptions. I liked the emerald eyes line. Strong entry, way to go Bartimaeus.

  7. The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge)

    .:band baby:.'s Buddy Icon .:band baby:.

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I’m flattered you choose me! =) I don’t play the horn though.. Percussion is more my thing ; ) But nice take on my life. =D
    ~
    I love the last line. And the descriptions of.. everything. Good story!
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