Saint Chuck's When I Grow Up Challenge: Montage

by Browncoatben

Weigtless, I float into the LEM . The moon is small in the window now. It’s over. Is it really over? Was I really there? Why is it impossible to truly appreciate something while it’s happening?

I wander back into the Command Module and peer out the opposite window. The Earth is getting close. Another few hours and we begin reentry checklist Alpha.
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I ease my foot off the gas as I enter the long right-hander. Peter Cunningham’s Acura is still just in front of me, making it hard as hell to pass. I burp the gas, drop into 4th, and nail the accelarator out of the turn, coming alongside Petey.

8700 RPM …and 5th.

Our doors are mere inches apart, but at least I’m not behind him anymore. He’s got the inside line…can I make this stick?
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Tony looks at me and smiles a stupid grin. He actually looks happy for me! I think, realizing that I just cost him $200,000. He kicks his board up into his hand and walks over.

“You’ll have to teach me that sometime, Ben” Tony Hawk says.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Saint Chuck's When I Grow Up Challenge: Montage

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 2 months ago

    Ah, the fantasies of youth. Nice rundown on the stuff that kept you occupied…or maybe what still keeps your mind going?

  2. Saint Chuck's When I Grow Up Challenge: Montage

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 2 months ago

    I like how each one is like sharing a vision, you didn’t state what they were, we had to read it, and therefore, join in your dreams. Fun!

  3. Saint Chuck's When I Grow Up Challenge: Montage

    Eckhouse's Buddy Icon Eckhouse

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Solid daydreaming there. “Burp the gas” is a perfect way to describe it, too.

  4. Saint Chuck's When I Grow Up Challenge: Montage

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Really great way to pull us in! Love it!

  5. Saint Chuck's When I Grow Up Challenge: Montage

    Steve Fairweather's Buddy Icon Steve Fairweather

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I really liked the flow of this. It transitions very well, shows how the youthful mind can shift gears so dramatically. One minute the cardboard box is a space ship, the next minute it’s a racing car.

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