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your move (precise maneuvers challenge)

The ebony queen gathered her robes and sashayed across the black and white marble floor. All the knights could do was watch as she lifted her silken leg and…

Time seemed to slow down.

The kings face slowly drained of colour. She had aimed the kick right where it would hurt the most. A moan escaped his lips that sounded like an elephant had stepped into a bed of nails, but was actually a simple “No”. He tried to move his hands to protect, but all they could do was hang limply by his side as if they were bunches of soggy grapes. He attempted to twist his obese body but only managed to expose himself more.

The foot with the high heeled shoe was still rising. He could see the little stubble of unshaven hairs on her knee. The foot connected with soft tissue.

A drop of sweat crept down his forehead, so slowly it could have been a snail on holiday.

Time was speeding up again.

The sweatdrop ran into his eye. A tear ran down his cheek. He toppled over.

“Check mate” she shouted and raised her hands in victory.

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your move (precise maneuvers challenge)
thebetweenspace
Posted 3 months ago

At one point you wrote but managed to only managed to. Other than that, this was awesome.
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JMSquire
Posted 3 months ago

Made me laugh! Good stuff, my first thought when I read ‘precise maneuvers’ was chess too.
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JMSquire
Posted 3 months ago

Oooh, and the first thing that came to my mind when I read “ebony queen” was an African transvestite… but that’s probably because I watched a Jerry Springer rerun earlier today.
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THX 0477
Posted 3 months ago

Awesome job on the challenge, lots of great similes and metaphors plus a neat idea for a ficlet using the chess thing.
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SKermitgorf
Posted 3 months ago

Ouch! cool live version of a chess game.
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PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)
Posted 3 months ago

thanks for killing my nirvana, thebetweenspace.
For that I’m giving myself 5 stars – because I can!
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Stovohobo
Posted 3 months ago

Hilarious, teeth-grinding pleasure at his pain – and any ficlet that can get all that has done a good job. Cool idea too.
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PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)
Posted 3 months ago

nirvana regained! – yay
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Jenunique
Posted 3 months ago

Love it!!!! Great detail!
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RazorbladeRhapsody
Posted 2 months ago

Nice concept, and vey creative. The king is so useless, non?