Please Say Yes (The Letter)

by Save the Soccer Player, Save the World

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Dear Brian,
I’ve only known you this year.. but I’ve liked you the whole time. This whole year, I’ve been trying to impress you. But then you lied.
You told your friends the total opposite of what happened every time we hung out. I started to wonder if I could trust you, but I’m sure you had your reasons.
I think you should know that you made me cry.. three times. One day, my friends told me you were mad at me and you said all this stuff about me.. I cried. The other two were because I knew I could never have you.
I also think you should know about the good times. You brighten my day. Everyday, you make me laugh. Thank you for that.
But now it’s time to get to the main part: My friends think you like me, but I’m not convinced. I really want to know if you’ll go out with me.. and if not.. at least tell me why.

-Lindsay

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Comments

Average Reader Rating: 3.5 stars out of 5

  1. Please Say Yes (The Letter)

    Save the Soccer Player, Save the World's Buddy Icon Save the Soccer Player, Save the World

    Posted about 1 year ago

    People who write a sequel.. please write what you think his response would be. Thanks :)

  2. Please Say Yes (The Letter)

    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted about 1 year ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    Ok, but not written too well. You have a lot of simple sentences that you could probably combine to make the story sound a bit more fluent. I would also try making it a bit more dramatic. Right it’s just a girl’s slightly pathetic confession to the guy she likes. Still a nice effort though.

  3. Please Say Yes (The Letter)

    Dangerous Angels' Buddy Icon Dangerous Angels

    Posted about 1 year ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    Ouch! I’m still wincing slightly from Saint Chuck’s whole slightly pathetic comment. Lol. It is true though. You should use more details, and you spelled opposite wrong, you might want to edit that.

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