Welcome Oblivion

by THX 0477

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Though they happened so quickly as to become jumbled in order, Sissy was aware of some number of pistol shots, one loud bang, a dull ache on the side of her head, and a stinging pain on her neck. All of this preceeded in rapid succession being jerked violently backward.

Something wooden cracked. A gurgling croak erupted from behind her. The river splashed joyfully to accept them. The night became suddenly darker, more stifling.

Frankly, she was a little disappointed. By all evidences she could ascertain, her life should have been flashing before her eyes. Instead all she could see was Joanie’s ghost-like apparition in the doorway of her until-recently, much-adored teacher.

Still, the water was warm and welcoming. Nothing else mattered. Indeed, the dark, wet oblivion seemed a pleasant alternative to the swirl of fear, guilt, and confusion she’d been suffering through on the dock. Wrapped in the river’s embrace, Sissy was content to drift away, perhaps to sleep in her would-be lover’s arms.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Welcome Oblivion

    Watween's Buddy Icon Watween

    Posted 2 months ago

    Wow. I love all the imagery. This whole series is addicting!

  2. Welcome Oblivion

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Powerful imagery. I like the muddled, confused way the intense final scene has been moving along for the involved characters.

  3. Welcome Oblivion

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    “Ah ha ha. Finally, a mistake,” he cackled maniacally.
    Wait, um… where was I? Oh yes. “Until recently” in this passage, “the doorway of her until recently much-adored teacher,” should probably be set off by em-dashes or commas.
    Other than that, brilliant as always. I love “wrapped in the river’s embrace.” Nice imagery. Though I’m inclined to believe someone will dive in after her.

  4. Welcome Oblivion

    g2 (la pianista irlandesa)'s Buddy Icon g2 (la pianista irlandesa)

    Posted 2 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I know everyone’s going on about the imagery, but it’s awesome, I’m not gonna lie. I’m thinking Perkins might be right; I have the feeling Sissy’s not completely out of the picture quite yet.

  5. Welcome Oblivion

    Hunting Beauty's Buddy Icon Hunting Beauty

    Posted 2 months ago

    hahaha. John, if I didn’t know any better I’d say you’ve been looking for a mistake to point out to THX . LOL

    Amazing imagery, as usual. You did a great job. And I agree with John and g2 when they say Sissy probably isn’t out of the picture yet.

  6. Welcome Oblivion

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Now that we all said it, he’s going to kill her just to prove us wrong.

  7. Welcome Oblivion

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 2 months ago

    On another series I might kill a character to spite the readers (which says a lot about my own pathology), but this series has been plotted out since ficlet #1 to bring us here, where it all started with a very bad dream. Wrap up soon to follow. Thanks for all the great comments, everyone!

  8. Welcome Oblivion

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I’m glad Sissy’s sticking around. I want to see what happens with her.

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