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Tony adjusted his mirror to get a good look at the person honking behind him. His eyelids creeped slowly towards center, leaving only a sliver of eyeball exposed. His teeth clenched and lips tightened. Tony hated to be rushed.

“Are you ready to order sir?” The crackled voice snapped Tony out of his murderous rage.

“Yeah um, I want two tacos and a grilled stuft burrito.” His head out the window, he gave a menacing glance back at the car behind him. I need to get that guy’s license number.

“Anything else sir?”

“Um, a large raspberry iced tea.”

“That’ll be $5.63 at the window.”

He pulled forward watching the rear view mirror for a plate number. Gotcha. Tony reached for his Blackberry to make note of the number when it rang, “Sloan” displayed on the screen.

“Hey boss.”

“Tony, we’ve got a situation over at Montega’s. I need you to meet Sarah there now.”

“Sure thing boss. But, isn’t George with her?”

“He’s the situation.”

Tony sped out of the drive-thru leaving his food and the plate number behind.

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thebetweenspace
Posted 3 months ago

It’s funny but this is actually my favorite so far in the series. I love the first paragraph and how it ends up that he was just in the drivethru. Great tease there.
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Ana Cristina
Posted 3 months ago

Awesome work on this series, which is no small feat as it was written backwards. Very believable characters and dialogue.
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KevMullins
Posted 3 months ago

Please allow me to ditto both Ana and Between here ;)
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.:band baby:.
Posted 3 months ago

yes me too. wow john, thiss is getting amazing!
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Mighty-Joe Young
Posted 3 months ago

man it is easy to get sucked into this
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ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫
Posted 3 months ago

ya.. this is awesome!! great stuff John!!
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JLaughter
Posted 3 months ago

Ha, this is my favorite of this series so far. The tense first paragraph, being in a drive-thru. I always enjoy your writing, John, but you’re hitting above the bar, today!