Not Quite the End

by [pens&feathers]

Bethany’s breath caught in her throat – fire, the one thing that made her tremble above all others. An irrational fear, no doubt, but a heart-gripping fear nonetheless. She stifled a sob as she heard the front door slam and the lock click.

Trapped?

Bethany peeped out of her cramped hiding place.

She could feel the heat radiating in nauseating waves. Paralyzed by fear, all she could do was watch in agony as black smoke bellowed into the kitchen, edged by yellow flames. And then the world began to fade, and the last thing Bethany heard was a strange, musical voice.

*

Emerging from inky blackness, Bethany stirred and a tremendous pain blossomed behind her eyes, in an unbelievable explosion of color and sensation as the world came flooding back.

Opening her eyes, and the first thing she saw was the fire. She sat bolt upright, about to scream, but a hand clamped itself over her mouth.

“Be quiet. Do not scream,” said the musical voice. “We are among the few survivors.”

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. Not Quite the End

    Nouvelle Bardot's Buddy Icon Nouvelle Bardot

    Posted about 1 year ago

    i’m guessing she was blind…and now she’s not…nonetheless i love this and want more.

  2. Not Quite the End

    [pens&feathers]'s Buddy Icon [pens&feathers]

    Posted about 1 year ago

    No, she isn’t blind. I just meant to imply that she had passed out. Sorry if it’s unclear. I’m glad you liked it though.

  3. Not Quite the End

    [pens&feathers]'s Buddy Icon [pens&feathers]

    Posted about 1 year ago

    I’ve edited it. Thank you for the feedback.

  4. Not Quite the End

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Absolutely begs for a sequel. Coool.

  5. Not Quite the End

    T.F. Torrey's Buddy Icon T.F. Torrey

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Rich and smooth detail; I hope you can come up with a sequel. :-)

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