Ahhhh, the Kraken….very nice “manfriend/boyfriend” shpeal. I liked it, and all of these.

I appreciated the naming of the Kraken, and the dynamic is good, but I think I got a bit lost in the schpeal, just a tad too long…or I have a very short attention span.

mermaidmerman stories are fun to read and write, you did a good job, do mermaids/men speak in italics? j/k

I really liked it, but I thought that the schpeal was too long, and that the readers don’t need a re-hashing of events we just read about.

All right, sorry to all those who liked the spiel, as I cut it out, but I was getting critiqued about that, so I edited it.

Kermit—It was supposed to convey reading one another’s conscious thoughts. Did it work, or should I do some more editing?

Works better. I’ll give another star for your trouble.

well thank you! lol

LOL . Manfriend. That’s funny. I like it.

lol that last pary was like hilarious love i dont find a thing wrong with it ! : ]