Beautiful imagery and descriptions. You seem to be getting even better…and that’s pretty hard.

Amazing writing…especially love the colors paragraphs…the simple sentences add a really powerful tone to it. I love it, especially the ‘bring forth the red’ line.

Beautifully written. I love the style of it.

You had me at, “his mortal dream has begun to bore me” BTW – only true criticism I can offer is that I like the way this ficlet is formatted. It’s formatted for a friendly and engaging read. Some of your earlier stuff was eloquently written, but suffered from “ran together” words. You are a talented writer, and I only offer that advice to encourage your talent….

ahh but yoda thats all my doing!

lol lol no no i know its all you THX

i am in awe at your vocabulary first of all

second of all im slightly embarassed about not being able to understand/comprehend the first paragraph but i know it sounds good so top marks there

and third of all WOW now we have somewhere to go with this

who is he? what has he done? who is she now? ooohhh the directions we could do!

crap and im suposed to be doing homework today

SCREW THAT !

No fury like a woman?? scorned.great story.

great! woohoo!

I was just reading your “About the Author” section – loved the words “Shadows on a Dungeon Wall” – inspiring and thought provoking, given the context in which you wrote the phrase…

Somehow I get the feeling you’re going to write a lot of ficlets here, and this site is going to turn into something very incredibly cool…

Keep writing!

- Yoda

alright sequel done :)

hope you like it

it’s not as….well vocabularly endowed…but i like it
and i hope everyone else does

what I want to know is – how come you can twist my thoughts and my ideas into a better story than i can?!?! damn you THX ; you good-writer-guy you
that’s why i’m glad i’m sequeling with you – at least i know that will give my ficlets half the chance of being read LOL

Wow, great. Love the imagery.