Interesting, really hints at a whole vast thingy-verse you’ve got bouncing around in your head.

This is really cool

Only criticism – you cant have a Sale and a Shale in the same story

Keep Sale, change Shale to…Khale…that’s much better and clearer

and have you ever read the….Doomspell Trilogy by Cliff McNish?!

If you havent i HIGHLY recommend you do – you’ll love it

Comment me when you’ve read it lol

You come up with quirky up with names for characters. Top Notch writing as usual.

I did have a problem with Sale and Shale being too similar. It’s not forbidden; it’s just confusing.
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Insolent newling – excellent.

Sale? Who’s Sale? There’s only Shale that I can see…