Fun, kind of overly sweet maybe, that it’s going so well…but maybe I’m just in a pessimistic mood.

Thanks, THX . It is going well, isn’t it? There’s probably a reason for that. {Smiles mysteriously.}

I like it a lot so far. I recommend in the part where Sarah repeats “Why?” to stall for time that you have her say “Why what?” to make that scene flow more easily, if you can spare the extra characters. I feel like I really know Sarah as a character. Great writing.

Thanks, Ana. Had to take away the speaker tag, but I hope it’s still evident that it’s her.

I am very impressed. You really seem to understand and care for these characters, especially Sarah.