Not the strongest piece in the series. Hard to tell who’s talking when and what’s going on for each character. The octopus was an odd end-point as well. I hope you didn’t feel rushed by Llama’s bit of silliness.

Sorry, I tried to clear it up somewhat, and yes, Llama’s “silliness” did rather tick me off.

The revision helps. So, it’s Jonathan asking about going back to get Winnie, right? I think the format dropping that to the next line is what makes it confusing. You could end the sentence about him wrinkling his nose with a comma to cheat a little bit and make it even more painfully obvious. Interesting dynamic here as well.