very nice.

Ok that’s as good as any private eye story I ever read, and I’ve read em all! crisp dialouge, I can picture the whole scene in my minds eye. best thing you’ve written so far!

Great beginning. Can’t wait to see where you’re headed.

Awesome imagery, definetly looking forward to a sequel.

Brilliant! You captured the essence of the challenge.

Wow, you really did a fabulous job with this! Perfectly portrayed. =)