OMG now that IS Funny! Loved the Cockney type accent.

And somehow I didn’t manage to use the word “innit”. I’m strangely proud of myself.

Dialogue is about my favourite thing to write – so I really liked this challenge – although the making it funny part was hard. I guess I could have written another passage about my murdered clown from a previous challenge.

Very glad you liked it Kermitgorf.

So funny. I love the last line!

funny! see if i spell stuff like that fifteen people tell me i spelt it wrong (spelled)

Haha, oh my god, that’s hysterical. I love the accent…and the last line was amazing.

I really loved the last line. very funny!

With the help of a friend of mine (British friend no less!) I edited and rewrote some of the dialogue.

Let me know how you like the new version, and if you read the old one, how you find the changes.

Oops. One “innit” crept in. Ah well, I’ll deal.

Yep that did it you know I think it’s good.
It was funny to start with.

LOL ! That’s hilarious!!!

i don’t get it, but even though i don’t, i still like the last line – hilarity!
nice job!=]

I’m not claiming to be an expert in this area, but the language sounded a bit off to me. Like it was forced or something, words didn’t seem to fit… I don’t know. That’s not to say I didn’t like it, cause I did really quite like it. And I’m really glad you attempted an accent at all that seemed totally random to me. Anyhooser, well done.