Lol i already found one mistake!!
I try mot to cry.
that should be i try NOT to cry. lol im not good at typing. . .

Very heartfelt Dana. The narrative is true to having a childs voice—it’s emotionally accurate and the poetic structure fits.

A touching story from a child’s point of view. It touched my heart. Thanks!

Awe. This was soo cute. It literally brought tears to my eyes. =)

sad. really like how you wrote it through the voice of a child
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by the way, you can fix your mistakes. When you visit this page, there should be an edit button just below the title and beside the “Add to AIM share” button

Very Very Good