ok first ‘here eyes so pretty’ should be her, and in the 5thish sentece I don’t think there should be a ‘her’ there. ‘her Isabella’? and I think it;d be easier to read with paragraphs. The fourth from last sentence, in my opinion, is just to long.. I think it should be divided up into 2 sentences. again this is all just my opinion. ((besides the misspelling))
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omg i luv this! please write a sequel! and i dont think its very hard to read. i think its awesome!!! pleaseeeeeee write a sequellll!