Dang, she’s got it bad for jeff, ahh unrequitted love, been there done that, better results tho than susan.
Once again a great read from you. 10stars

Good job.

Thanks – had to submit something in honor of Sain’t Chuck’s ficlet challenge. Not sure it’s my best, but I gave it a fair try! : )

Very real…almost too real for me. *shudder. None the less, great entry. As usual.

Nice work! It moves a little too quickly, but then again, it is a ficlet! :) Besides, I know that my style is slower-paced and more descriptive than most, while you clearly prefer a plain, realistic perspective. I like it a lot! Four out of five stars.

By the way, I hope I didn’t come off as rude in that… rereading that, I realized that the “plain, realistic” bit could be quite insulting! Sorry. I just meant that it’s more like a real thought instead of a flowery, intricate passage. I tend towards the latter… :D But I did like it!

No problem, Luisa – I wasn’t offended.
This site offers an opportunity to playfully experiment with your writing style, gaining feedback regarding what works / doesn’t. I appreciate your comments. When I first joined ficlets, it was Howie Amourscow whose writing I “took a shine” to… I’d recommend checking out his repertoire / library of silver-tongued belles-lettres._ I see that you just joined – I recommend you read as much as you write. Thanks for reading mine! Thanks, Yoda

so sad need some happy stories

very nice, yet sad. ‘secially because it happens all the time… 5*’s

HAHAHHAHA ! This should not be funny, but I love how very pathetic this character is. I’m a pretty sympathetic person…within reason. She’s hilarious. Did you write this without laughing?

I’m sorry. That sounds rude to the poor, lovesick girl. Ode to Drama Queen, how you make me chortle!

Awesome job. Poor Susan …tear

Thanks for all the comments. I liked your comment so much, Kermitgorf, that I made it the title of the sequel…

Holy crack! One minute it’s calm, writing a post-it note. Two seconds later she’s this psycho crazy ex-girlfriend speeding off to wreak psycho crzy havoc. One of those things were all you can do is stare, shocked, wondering when did it get this intense…. and laugh. So I did.
Read the sequels as well. Me likey.

true love, how sweet!

Impressively realistic. I started having flashbacks to my horrible angst ridden break-up.

Wow. That’s harsh. Stupid Jeff…

I bet you Jeff is married! And Susan, well, she sounds like Borderline Personality Disorder. Fun piece.

LoA

Ah yes, the Borderline personality. Susan’s feelings of power mixed with insecurities would likely justify that diagnosis, though her MMPI is more consistent that of Paranoid Personality Disorder (PPD).