woops thats gunna b awkward lol nice
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whoa so awkward

whoa so awkward

Oh my goodness! That reminds me of some people that I know, their tongues and their brains don’t communicate! Good job!

wow, really did not see that coming! nice job.

Oh, now that was a surprise ending. Great job.
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that just creeped me out sorry baby dying… good dialogue but depressing topic..

Saw it coming, but that’s probably because I have a friend who had a stillbirth, so my radar went off as soon as I saw the title.

I love the way you’ve pulled it off, though. The senseless joy the neighbor has and her refusal to let the grieving mother get a word in edgewise is very (tragically) realistic.

See, I was thinking the big sister had died. Great twists and turns, but there is certainly some intentionally misleading dialogue in there (i.e., “She really loves the baby, actually…”).

this is really sad. =[
i agree with Ariel, the mother never got a word in.. tht made me think something was wrong that the mother couldn’t bring herself to say.
awesome job!

that’s one realistic looking doll!!!
nice twist! I saw it coming, but I knew this was a twist challenge :)

Ouch, what an oblivious twit. I think we’ve all known at least one well-intentioned idiot like that…or two.

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Nice dialog – great challenge idea by uselessness too… I’m enjoying these. Nicely done!

A very emotional entry. Believable dialogue and a truly obnoxious character. I think the ending lost some of its shock value because of the parent’s demeanor leading up to it (from the sixth line, I knew what was coming). Also, the bit about the doll seemed awfully contrived… what was the actual parent doing with the doll in the first place? Still, this was a great one. Thanks for entering my challenge!