Thats pretty cool,its kinda like a poem about a girl longing for LOVE . I really like it though.

For just an attempt at poetry, I’d say this is pretty awesome! Just the right amount of sadness and longing, and the words flow pretty well…I really like it!
LoA

you call that an attempt? I call it a success!

Ha, I agree with Celestic. This is so pretty. I love it.

I agree with Celestic too, total success!

whadeya mean, “an attempt”? This is pretty dang sweet!