hmmph. not sure i like it any better than the draft. feels rushed to me. eh. feedback?

rushed. hint intended.
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wait! don’t read this yet, i’m editing!

pah. whtevr. it’s legal to read now. no editing done. feedback me.

It takes place over a long period of time, but it seems to flow nice. To me at least. Nice job.
LoA

i agree with band baby