Great story idea, and I like the character. Your tenses wound up a little confusing, I think cause of the source material conflicting with your letter idea (future vs. present vs. past). But still quite a neat scene to picture.
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great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

sry I clicked it too many times lol I love the story though really, that’s how much I love it…how many times I posted a comment lol great job.

LOL at the number of comments Freedom posted.

I love the way you use words like brung and takin’, it allows us to see this character more clearly. I agree with THX though about the tenses but it would be hard to work it all in and you did it in a way that still makes sense so well done. :)

thanks for the input about tense, I think I fixed it.

Great job! I like the use of southern speak. Makes it more real for folks like me. We talk like that, a lot. Too much. Good thing there’s back space. ;)

Much much better. It flows better and the sign off is nicer! Love it :)

Congrats on being featured Kermit!
Very nice!
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Congratulations on being featured, also. Your characters are memorable and the dialect is great! I had to comment, even though I think you know that this is good. :)

Can’t remember how the tenses were, but it seems to work now, like he’s reviewing a few things for the reader and then switching to the present tense as he writes. And so nice that is flows so well now that it’s featured and all.
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wow. this is really great. congrats on being featured!

Congrats on being featured! I like this, it seems to work quite well.

Congrats on being featured! And nice story too. I like how it’s a letter!
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brillliant…just brilliant