Wow, very good!
LoA

Hate’s passion too.
I love that line.

wow, that’s awesome =]

Your a great writer. I love you set up the story. Love the last to lines especially :]
5stars

I want to like this as a standalone, but I really feel it needs more setup to explain why she’s upset, and what his motivation is to kiss her at that moment.

Last like is amazing. I feel like I need a prequel as well. Don’t much cares what happens after, just, what the heck did he do?

Last line…last line is amazing. AMAZING !

The last line was awesome!!!

Must agree with everyone, the last line is awesome. This really makes you want to know more about the story.

“in a mudpie of love; a gooey tarpit of affection.”
^{love that line}

very nicely done :)