Amazing imagery, wonderful emotion. I love how you take this guy who’s roiling inside, and then paint that picture across the sky. Amazing.
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Fantastic! The imagery is amazing, I can see the scene my mind. Not to mention how easily it is to identify with the narrator.

Gorgeous work.

Completely agree with the comments about the imagery. Beautiful. I had to read through it a few times, I liked it so much.

so magically beautiful. you really can sympathise with the character in a charming, sad manner.
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This is beautiful—you do an amazing job coordinating emoted and physical imagery. I hope that I can write this well someday.

Thank you! =)