My Aunt had one of those ‘I once saw a ghost’ stories she liked to tell and it involved her waking up in the middle of the night and seeing a creepy face sort of floating just above her. Scared the cream cheese out of her and she never forgot it. Your story reminded me of that, thank you :) I liked the comparison of the leering visage and the man in the moon.
I just noticed how the it sort of leap frogged from one person to the next. I like that, wondering what happened to Maria, if she had known the person who’s face she saw.
This gave me chills. really good stuff. If I were to critique to make it better, for me the ending was perfect without day four. because of the nature of ficlets there’s not enough space to elaborate or even explain what happened to Maria. For me the creepy climax was the end of day 3—literal chills. and then day four was bordering on funny and confusing.
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