Wow, you took that in a totally unexpected direction. I can really feel the sense of derealization and kind of shocked stupor that everyone was in, including my impromptu hero. Very deep reaction you’ve described as well, not at all the rote, expected action-movie stuff.
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p.s. you’ve got the victim as ‘women’ twice instead of ‘woman’—still a rocking awesome ficlet.

Oof I guess my grammar is a bit off since I’ve been talking/writing/living German. Ah well, noted and edited, thanks.

Excellent! Real, evocative stuff which focuses on the emotions of the characters. It’s really fascinating to see how other people interpret my writing and where they take it – thanks :-)

He took off his shirt. Ooh la la! lol just kidding. I agree with thx too: a completely different feel than a hollywood action…more feeling, and easier to relate to. That’s VERY good :D

Raw emotion, heroic.. paced well and highly believeable.. situation was tense and gripping. great sequel.
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Daaang…I just think I’ll have to go to the beginning of this series.

Another totally awesome sequel to a great series!

Now that’s the mark of a great sequel, when it makes someone want to jump back to where the fun started. Well done!

Aw thanks guys, all these comments have really made my crappy week a whole lot better. =)

Sequel done. I was being all serious, but couldn’t resist throwing in the ‘awesome’. I hope it didn’t ruin the whole piece.
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Wow. Really good ficlet.