on this story I was gonna write it about some one that no one could see or they were in a coma, but i figure that since there’ so many stories like that I would write something else. So i did . And here it is. Enjoy!=]]

Cool stuff. Well done. Just a hint though, I think you’d be able to get more dramatic tension in the piece if you split it up into smaller paragraphs

Causes the reader to break, think, then get slammed by the next line.

S.J.

I thought it was one of those stories, too; nice twist. This was obviously written by someone who has had a computer crash on them in the past, right?

It’s neat. I like stories about things that are normally inanimate.