You learned:
Girls can be so tantilizing, it’s just evil when they snatch themselves away.

Great conversation and vivid description of the girl! YO\ou really studied! ;)
LoA

Good painting of the image =)

Ah, young unrequited love. This brings back many a sorrowed memory. As a ginger headed geek, I played the young man in this scenario many times during my school days. I think you did a very good job of showing his despair and longing for something just out of reach.
I suggest taking your time on the next one and that you pay a little more attention to the grammar, specifically capitalization. Bad habits are hard to break. Ridding yourself of them now will help you become a better writer.