Not sure if this is really good or not.. I tried to check my grammer..

It is good! Really good. Awesome job!
LoA

you have an extra c in since just thought you might want to know…
other then that it was amazing!
LoA
((So i was commenting you on myspace and i almost put LoA after my comment… haha whoops =]))

beautiful story.. could potentially make someone misty eyed.. rich in symbolism.. useless should be proud of the responses to his/her challenge is generating.