Oh my god, this is amzing. I love how you described everything. Very well written.
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Wowzers, very good description, and a cool concept at the end.

Nice jump to something magical and bizarre from the challenge. Lots of fun stuff just barely suggested at here.
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I think this would be a great start to a series! haunting entry!
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oooh…sees who? it would be a great start to a series, indeed.
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Nice little hint at the story and what could be happening. I also like the subtly unique approach to the dialogue.