Ooh, chilling. Great job with an unnamed horror through most of it, so we feel as confident as your protagonist, and then oops. Nice ending with a double reveal (that the escape is not successful and what the thing is the person is feeling.)
Loa

I like this, makes me feel like having a good shudder.

I agree with THX , I felt confident along with your character, then suddenly not so confident! A horrifying entry!
LoA

Ooh, this is amazing. To think, I was so sure he’d gotten away :)

LoA

Mwaaahahahahahaaahhh!!

Oh, I just think this story really needed that. Fantastic teaser the whole way through with him thinking nothing could go wrong. And then a perfect last line.

What a great twist at the end. I didn’t realize until I finished reading the last line that I’d been holding my breath the whole time. The mark of a masterfully written suspense piece.
LoA