do u like it? say yes say yes say yes!! please. this is my first one and is probably bad. please comment and tell me what i could do better. btw this is a true story with the names changed

Needs more organization? It would make it a lot easier to read if you separated it into miniature paragraphs with a full line of space.

Decent story, overall, though. It’s one everyone can identify with.

alright thanks for the comment i will remember that