Wow, that was intense. The buildup was really very good. Great job!
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The really great thing about this one was that the growing size of the sentences (as per the challenge) actually matched up metaphorically with the build up of emotion within the scene. Masterfully done.

Okay so the last line was confusing, but I love how this builds up to a climactic ending!

I love that this challenge fits so well with all dialogue.. one of my favorite forms of writting. I agree with BaRomero about the build up.
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Intense.
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A wholehearted ditto of what BARomero said! And it works so well, because I can completely relate. I think I’ve had that conversation before. :)

Great job! And I like the format – it’s so easy to read with this challenge.

BARomero basically said it just right. The sentences really build it up. Better than some of the middle- to high-school ficlets about ooey gooey love and romance. This was good. =)