Great point of entry to a sci-fi tale…I really like the medium range point of view, if that makes sense. It’s neither too narrow nor too coldly explanatory. Nicely done.
LoA

Wow, both the title and the first sentence drew me in. This feels like one of those stories that is written so uniquely, so well that you just have to read it. There are some sentences that really show how hopeless the situation is, and yet, like THX said, keep the point of view objective at “medium range.”

nice, I’m really liking the imagery within the story the character feels like a John McClane your tough, rugged character all about action.