First the title drew me in, because it was so distinctive, then the setting (I’m currently fascinated with Chicago, never been but want to go), and by the end I was flying through the lines wanting to know what would happen next before I found myself at the end, so many questions unanswered. So that means you’re simply going to have to continue it. Sorry, but there it is. :p
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Ooh, that went from drudgery to disaster to worse. Very nicely done. Horrifying in a very modern way.
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I love the story. The ending is so terrifying.

I like the word glutted to describe the clouds, and the duet of information and description and how it dances together without stepping on eachothers toes. Sorry, I haven’t had any coffee yet. Depending on what the guy ultimately wants with this persons identity will show us how original the story is. I have a feeling he’s in the backseat right now, suspense! Good Job.