Ha! You’re punny. ;-P
Really getting interesting here. I like the back and forth you’re creating between these two characters. And this is a very strong female protagonist who’s willing to stand up to such a powerful being. Your friend must no longer think he’s like Q, given that there was no backlash to her mouthing off.

She’s become use to him by now and kind of takes his power for granted. She has hung out with him too long. Besides he is looking and acting more “human” at this point so it’s easy for her to forget.
As always, I’m enjoying your input.

I was thinking along the same tracks, Kev. I keep expecting for Dreanna to have a moment of awe, but she keeps jabbing.

Still enjoying the series.

Really good point Browncoatben… I’ve been feeling that I’ve let the “godness” of the Eric character slip out of focus too much. I have something planned :)

I dig the dialog, really snappy and short, and you cover a lot of ground in this post with the quick dialog. The main character’s also, as you said, humanizing a lot more, and it’s easier to relate to him…especially when shifting the focus of a conversation away from a woman!

I like her way of lashing out and his redirection of the conversation. It feel natural enough to me.

I like all this back history too. And the dialogue feels good, but while you’re doing dialogue, commas go in between the quotation marks and what’s not talk. Like: “Before it became their tomb,” Dreanna replied. You may have solved the issue later, but, obviously, I haven’t read on. I’m just a stickler like that.

I like all this back history too. And the dialogue feels good, but while you’re doing dialogue, commas go in between the quotation marks and what’s not talk. Like: “Before it became their tomb,” Dreanna replied. You may have solved the issue later, but, obviously, I haven’t read on. I’m just a stickler like that.