I like it. enough said

You really captured the feeling of unrequited love!

really beautiful! nice job.
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OMG ! You have no idea how much I can relate to this. Great job!

I loved it! Awesome job Ana! It feels like highschool, where hormones are in rage we always want what we can’t have.
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Thanks, everyone! And Blusparrow, I teach high school, so I guess I have a front-row view of those adolescent hormones. ;-)

Great job and thanks for entering!

“I am torn asunder by your oblivion.” and “I am set adrift in the sea of your indifference.” are my favorite lines. This was such a heart-wrenching and real description of wanting what you can’t have.

Fantastic entry into the challenge. Younger versions of myself (middle school TBS , high school TBS , college TBS ) would have definitely related to the sentiment of this poem. Oh, the agony of unrequited love.

I like the, “I am set adrift in the sea of your indifference” line. I’ve filled the sea of indifference before and on the other end of the spectrum I’ve swam in it, so that line really got to me.

I cry till my eyes are unable to tell fantasy apart from truth.
O love that line. It’s so easy to relate to.

Wow. The word choice and imagery were amazing, and you captured it so beautifully. Wow.
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whoa.
spectacular job!
i am speechless.
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