really well written.
:)

I love this one. Reading your stories sometimes helps me come up with ideas of Me and JB. I really like this one!

This was fantastic. You packed a whole lot of punch into not so many words. :) (which I never seem to manage to do) I can really sense the feeling behind this… and I can relate, which is always fantastic. (Relating to the reader, I mean). haha.
Good job, definate 5*’s
LoA
(Oh, and nice use of anaphora)