This is good stuff. It’s taken such an interesting turn. Lots of possibilities. Someone should come along and really turn it on its ear.

I like how you’re keeping up with his over-thinking coffee-shop mentality, which is what makes me like it so much. _ “I was never a huge fan of that kind of circular reference.”_

I liked it, but I’m cautiously worried. Carolina seems – a little user-friendly, and our protagonist has fallen in ‘love’ with someone he doesn’t know, so that’s a bit weird too.