I like that these are written in first person. Makes it easy to pull for the main character right from the start. Or maybe there’s some reason we shouldn’t?
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Actually, I’d been debating with myself whether to write it in first – or third-person. I decided on first because it really exposes the character more, and as you said, pull for him.

I think it works much better in first than it would in third. Good choice.
That note about the little girl automatically brought images of Richard Pryor in The Toy. I’m sure that’s not the direction you’re going though. =P

1st person does make it personal,and the reader can identify more. well done impressive, you have such range.

pardon this blunt comment, but, is there anything you can’t write?!

wow. this is honestly some of the best writing ive read on ficlets. the descriptions are completely amazing.

I like the sense that the character is peripherally aware of how things are in this world but also a little naive to how he should entirely act (staring too long at the girl).

Thought it would be fun to sequel this. Hope it’s ok and fits in with what you were doing.

Fantastically described scene. I especially liked the detail about her eyes being the kind that hate was bred in.

As thebetweenspace said “the kind that hate was bred in” is a fantastic line. As to this piece overall… wow, just wow!

Great story so far, I got the same feeling as THX did about the character knowing the way things work, but not being entirely sure how to act.