On the road again. I like how she was proud of herself for avoiding the trap of buying touristy junk. (She needs something to be proud of with her life being so tough and all).

A nice little moment of personal triumph and progress, on a small scale. Minor point, you kind of have her leave the store twice, ‘walks out’ then later ‘makes her exit’.

Although the last paragraph is a little awkward, the action is still clear, and so is the emotion. Still feeling great.

That sounds much better, good job!

The way u write I can see the action as it happens, in the here & now, unusual style of writing, at least none I ‘ve seen before but hey I’m 13 !