Ooh, there’s hope she’s not dead. Those infamous shoulder wounds, could go either way. Nice trick with the ring in the mouth.

This is really gripping stuff! Has me on the edge of my seat… :D

Another good entry here. One thing I’d change though is that last paragraph. “and shot and shot and shot” simply doesn’t sound as good to me as “he emptied his gun,” or some variation. I understand what you’re getting at, but the language of it just feels clumsy.

Actually, I kinda like the “shot and shot and shot.”