Awesome. Brilliantly told, as are all your fics are. I didn’t see the twist coming from a mile away. I caught on at the photo album part, but I’m always looking for the twist. It’s a fun little game for me to figure them out. But you kept me guessing until very close to the end.
Fantastic entry. And thank you very much for entering my challenge.

I think that the nature of the challenge makes it so that everyone reading knows a twist will eventually be coming, and so we’re looking for it. The biggest twist would be to make an entry with no twist at all. I liked this entry, got an inkling as to where it was going with the album as well.

I didn’t know what the challenge was, so I wasn’t expecting a twist and definitely didn’t see it coming. This was brilliantly done. I love the whole M. Night Shyamalan (or however you spell his name) type twist ending.

I was thinking someone else was dead, and she was in denial. Nicely told with a very magical sort of feel to it.

Interesting that the shoes would make a noise! Good twist!

awesome! I guessed it, but I was looking for the twist too. :) I like that her spirit is in her burial clothes, a foreshadowing of the twist to come.

no way her moms a ghost, I didn’t expect that!

@Sarah, Your comment made me actually laugh out loud. Awesome!

Okay, I didn’t see that coming at all! Very nice! But now.. after reading the comments I’m a little confused. Is it Sophie that died or her mother? It could almost be either.. uhm a little help pwease??
LoA

I meant for it to be Sophie who died. Which would explain why her mother is looking at an album (presumably of pictures of Sophie) and crying. Also, Sophie is in her best clothes, as if her mother dressed her that way for her own funeral.

Yikes, I didn’t mean to give myself stars! :[

Wow, great job! It gave me the chills at the end. I love how you were able to make the twist just sneak up on us, but it was natural all at once.
LoA

I thought it was really good! There were a ton of little clues inside the story, but you didn’t know what the the clues meant until the end. Very good!

I thought this was awesome!
I always love a good ghost story!

There was a twisty feeling in her stomach like a knot she couldn’t undo —I love that line!!

@ Anna you can’t tell us the mind of the author that is like T.S elliot’s wife publishing his key to The Wasteland. In the words of Hunter s Thompson Make the bastards chase you.lol i liked it.

Would Bruce Willis make a good Sophie??? HEHEHE

Nice piece, Ana. Like the others, the album tipped it for me. However, had it not been in a twist challenge, I wouldn’t have seen it coming.

Wait… If Sophia died, how come her shoes made noise?!

@oy that’s what i said

I’m going to take some of Trifalmadorian’s own advice and not answer your question, Oy, even if it costs me a star. ;-)