Your description of the psychic’s office is exactly how I picture one to be like (never been in one – yet). My only problem is the last line – it sounds a bit awkward. I think if you wrote it, “It’s you…” she whimpered, it would sound better, without the “out.”

Thank you very much!

It’s my first one, so I appreciate the feedback.

Wow, for a first one, it was great. Welcome to Ficlets! And if the site ever slows down and you publish multiple copies, just go into one of them and click on draft to clear up your list of ficlets.

Thanks, I’ve been trying to figure that out…

I enjoyed the tone you set with this ficlet, as well as the fact that you describe the colors of the room. It really brings it to life. And welcome to ficlets! :]

Very ominous ending and well-described scene. Welcome to ficlets!

I really like this! I love the last line – like there’s more to the story!
I look forward to reading more.